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Mar. 29th, 2002 04:26 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
ladylarkruneThis is a fan fiction that was submitted to a friend's website. It falls into one of the the worst fan fictions I have ever read.
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title, why was I created
its about a lady who is incredibly strong and here only friend is Baulma her name is Bomb
why was I created why was I born with so much power who is my mom. replied Bomb.
Bomb what's wrong, said Baulma nothing, replied Bomb. Vegita walks in, HEY Bomb can you upgrade the gym, says Vegita with puppy eyes. Bomb slowly turns and begins to cry and pushes Vegita aside and runs out crying. Look what you did jerk now go talk to her now and be nice, yelled Baulma. ok women I will, Vegita runs off after her. Following the sad crying sound Vegita catches Bomb and holds her tight and close to him. now what's wrong was it something I said did I do something wrong Vegita replies as she struggles to get away. no its not you its the pain that screams out in side of me it says that I'm a freak of many light powers. said Bomb. Vegita clamped her tighter and smoothes her hair its all right he kisses the top of her head and she looks up as he says, its all right it is when you go super sajin I can do it to. that day Bomb and Vegita sat there together falling in love. and Yamcha and Baulma sat down kissing all day later in one year both cupolas get married and have two children. ^_^
the end
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I liked that Cupolas had children. Since they normally are all lonely on top of cathedrals.
Actually I feel horrible while reading this. Because the person who wrote it has such a poor grasp of grammar, spell, story, plot, characterization. EVERYTHING. I am sad for our public schools (the author is a native speaker of English.)
~*~
title, why was I created
its about a lady who is incredibly strong and here only friend is Baulma her name is Bomb
why was I created why was I born with so much power who is my mom. replied Bomb.
Bomb what's wrong, said Baulma nothing, replied Bomb. Vegita walks in, HEY Bomb can you upgrade the gym, says Vegita with puppy eyes. Bomb slowly turns and begins to cry and pushes Vegita aside and runs out crying. Look what you did jerk now go talk to her now and be nice, yelled Baulma. ok women I will, Vegita runs off after her. Following the sad crying sound Vegita catches Bomb and holds her tight and close to him. now what's wrong was it something I said did I do something wrong Vegita replies as she struggles to get away. no its not you its the pain that screams out in side of me it says that I'm a freak of many light powers. said Bomb. Vegita clamped her tighter and smoothes her hair its all right he kisses the top of her head and she looks up as he says, its all right it is when you go super sajin I can do it to. that day Bomb and Vegita sat there together falling in love. and Yamcha and Baulma sat down kissing all day later in one year both cupolas get married and have two children. ^_^
the end
~*~
I liked that Cupolas had children. Since they normally are all lonely on top of cathedrals.
Actually I feel horrible while reading this. Because the person who wrote it has such a poor grasp of grammar, spell, story, plot, characterization. EVERYTHING. I am sad for our public schools (the author is a native speaker of English.)
